Thanks, Tim. You clearly know your stuff, based on your articles about classic hard boiled crime and noir, and it means a lot for my stuff to get the nod of approval. Really.
Ooo, the backstory with his brother and parents... that's intriguing! And this line: "I moved against the stream of pedestrians like a salmon looking for a good time." It made me laugh. I really feel like i'm slinking around with him! Awesome writing.
Thanks for the kind words. I've been working hard at trying to balance world building against keeping the word count to an acceptable length for folks reading on their phones. It's not easy! :)
You got me hooked. The plot is running on all cylinders, and this chapter shows depth in the protagonist with his family: brother, father, mother.
Thanks, Tim. You clearly know your stuff, based on your articles about classic hard boiled crime and noir, and it means a lot for my stuff to get the nod of approval. Really.
Ooo, the backstory with his brother and parents... that's intriguing! And this line: "I moved against the stream of pedestrians like a salmon looking for a good time." It made me laugh. I really feel like i'm slinking around with him! Awesome writing.
Hi Gigi!
Thanks for the kind words. I've been working hard at trying to balance world building against keeping the word count to an acceptable length for folks reading on their phones. It's not easy! :)
Ha I know what you mean! You’re doing great.